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str8's South Park script
I read str8's South Park script (PM him for a copy), and he requested that I (and I guess others) make their critiques on the board, so that's what I'm doing.
Overall, very funny and very true to the characters/feeling of the show. I could see/hear the characters speaking their lines for the most part. I might tone the language down in parts and just make up swear words, as they are going to be bleeped as they are now. I think a couple of typos, no biggie. My main advice would be the ending--it isn't strong enough of a payoff at the end, as it's been solid up to that point. I'll wait for other peoples' opinions and can offer more if you want.
I will refrain on commenting on your looks as I know you are supersensitive.
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