Politics: A new beginning

[Shape Shifter]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
the people who defended the guy here are generally liberals (Ty and SS).

Disagreeing with the party line, while perhaps criminal under the Patriot Act, does not make one a liberal.

[robustpuppy]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
just hyperbole, yes?
classic politics board style
please relax now, yes?

damned hy-per-bul-ee
fucked with Hank's syllable count
haiku foiled again

[ltl/fb]

Originally posted by Say_hello_for_me
Signed

Not Puffy

I am a little puffy this morning. My shoes are tight.

[notcasesensitive]

Originally posted by robustpuppy
damned hy-per-bul-ee
fucked with Hank's syllable count
haiku foiled again

this is not his sole
haiku issue can't you see
overuse of yes.

[Hank Chinaski]

Originally posted by robustpuppy
damned hy-per-bul-ee
fucked with Hank's syllable count
haiku foiled again

you say hy-per-bul-ee
I say hy-per-bula

but you, I think are from a richer neighborhood, so I stand corrected

[ltl/fb]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
you say hy-per-bul-ee
I say hy-per-bula

but you, I think are from a richer neighborhood, so I stand corrected

What the fuck is wrong
with you people? you have left
out a needed dash.

[Atticus Grinch]

Okay, time to air out a pet peeve. Haiku is an ancient art form that cannot be masted by fifth graders. It is not sufficient merely to have a 5-7-5 rhyme scheme, any more than one can successfully emulate Dickinson merely by writing to the tune of "Yellow Rose of Texas" and throwing in some grammatically unnecessary dashes.

Haiku is the written representation of a fleeting aesthetic moment in which the observer becomes one with the observed. The imagery is almost always of nature as a metaphor for mood, often including highly sexual or introspective attitudes. Occasionally, the third line appears to be a non sequitur, but actually relates subtly to the prior twelve syllables. Try writing an independent non sequitur clause as your third line, and your haiku will almost always improve.

Thus:

Waves crash at dewed shore
Washing rock with spittled foam
Paigow hates JRUSS.

[robustpuppy]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
you say hy-per-bul-ee
I say hy-per-bula

hy-per-bul-a means
a curve; my curves are lovely
(not overstatement)

[Hank Chinaski]

Originally posted by Atticus Grinch
Haiku is the written representation of a fleeting aesthetic moment in which the observer becomes one with the observed. The imagery is almost always of nature as a metaphor for mood, often including highly sexual or introspective attitudes. Occasionally, the third line appears to be a non sequitur, but actually relates subtly to the prior twelve syllables. Try writing an independent non sequitur clause as your third line, and your haiku will almost always improve.

thank you, Atticus, for moving to my defense. Mine always have a somewhat unrelated third line, although I admit not as apparently unrelated as your example. In my defense i can only offer a "pearls before swine" type explanation for not moving even more away from the earlier lines. I do question your insistance on art not growing, but you speak to a more pointed question.
This non-sequitor requirement is why I've sat silently while the semi-literate criticize my syllabel counts. I knew the cognoscente would side with me. for god sakes Haiku started with a charecter based language. Not to mention the absurdity of giving Hank Fucking Chinaski poetry advice-

[ltl/fb]

Originally posted by Atticus Grinch
Okay, time to air out a pet peeve. Haiku is an ancient art form that cannot be masted by fifth graders. It is not sufficient merely to have a 5-7-5 rhyme scheme, any more than one can successfully emulate Dickinson merely by writing to the tune of "Yellow Rose of Texas" and throwing in some grammatically unnecessary dashes.

Haiku is the written representation of a fleeting aesthetic moment in which the observer becomes one with the observed. The imagery is almost always of nature as a metaphor for mood, often including highly sexual or introspective attitudes. Occasionally, the third line appears to be a non sequitur, but actually relates subtly to the prior twelve syllables. Try writing an independent non sequitur clause as your third line, and your haiku will almost always improve.

Thus:

Waves crash at dewed shore
Washing rock with spittled foam
Paigow hates JRUSS.

Yank the stick out of
your tight (not in a good way)
ass, atticus grinch.

[Atticus Grinch]

Originally posted by ltl/fb
Yank the stick out of
your tight (not in a good way)
ass, atticus grinch.

Physician, de-stick thyself.*

*a.k.a. Bitch, please.

[Say_hello_for_me]

lines of hungry ants
march towards mountains of jelly
awkward lines, drawn out

Originally posted by Atticus Grinch
Okay, time to air out a pet peeve. Haiku is an ancient art form that cannot be masted by fifth graders. It is not sufficient merely to have a 5-7-5 rhyme scheme, any more than one can successfully emulate Dickinson merely by writing to the tune of "Yellow Rose of Texas" and throwing in some grammatically unnecessary dashes....


Thus:

Waves crash at dewed shore
Washing rock with spittled foam
Paigow hates JRUSS.

[robustpuppy]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
thank you, Atticus, for moving to my defense. Mine always have a somewhat unrelated third line, although I admit not as apparently unrelated as your example. In my defense i can only offer a "pearls before swine" type explanation for not moving even more away from the earlier lines. I do question your insistance on art not growing, but you speak to a more pointed question.
This non-sequitor requirement is why I've sat silently while the semi-literate criticize my syllabel counts. I knew the cognoscente would side with me. for god sakes Haiku started with a charecter based language. Not to mention the absurdity of giving Hank Fucking Chinaski poetry advice-

Hank,

Atticus is the one who's absurdly giving Hank Fucking Chinaski poetry advice, you ironic wit, you.

I was advising that Hank learn how to fucking count and pronounce. That comes in handy even in the dirty underbelly.

Prosaically yours,
RP

[Hank Chinaski]

Originally posted by ltl/fb
Yank the stick out of
your tight (not in a good way)
ass, atticus grinch.

better:

men love what they know-
cannot the world change abit?
suppositories?

[sgtclub]

Originally posted by Hank Chinaski
better:

men love what they know-
cannot the world change abit?
suppositories?

Take it to the FB - this board is for seriously assinine discussions regarding politics only, not poetry.