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Originally posted by Flinty_McFlint
I read str8's South Park script (PM him for a copy), and he requested that I (and I guess others) make their critiques on the board, so that's what I'm doing.
Overall, very funny and very true to the characters/feeling of the show. I could see/hear the characters speaking their lines for the most part. I might tone the language down in parts and just make up swear words, as they are going to be bleeped as they are now. I think a couple of typos, no biggie. My main advice would be the ending--it isn't strong enough of a payoff at the end, as it's been solid up to that point. I'll wait for other peoples' opinions and can offer more if you want.
I will refrain on commenting on your looks as I know you are supersensitive.
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I think you're unfairly harsh. I'll bet most people here would LOVE the ending. I'm going to solicit the opinion of at least two other posters here. Plus, you didn't mention anything about how I described Cartman's hair or legs.
P.S. I was being facetious, chimp.