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Originally posted by nononono
You have suggestions for a re-write, maybe add in some gratuitous commas or leave some out just for fun?
I like the art. Reminds me of things I used to know.
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I would put brackets all over the place to annoy the crap out of RP and would have red markered and rewrote the whole thing, but that is just me. No actual suggestions and too tired to revise.
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